Did I write a good editorial for a school newspaper project?

I really hate to be critical, but this needs a lot of work. For one, you really need someone to double check your grammar issues. There are some major problems here. Try reading it out loud to yourself, it really helps. Also, there is no real explanation of what it is you are trying to convey. The sentences sound choppy and it doesn't make a whole lot of sense. This sounds more like you are reading an outline of what you want to write about. I love the fact that you are writing for your school paper; however, you need to give this a little more time. Research your topic deeper, and see what you come up with. This is a great start, and I am sure with some more hard work you will make it perfection!